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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and derinking habits in five Australia cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and derinking habits in five Australia cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph demonstrates the evaluation of five different places that exist in Australia (Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane,
Adelaide
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, and Hobart) for their
coffee
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 and
tea
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 consumption habits in the
last
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 four weeks. The habits are categorized on three different scales: buying fresh
coffee
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, buying
instant
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coffee
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, and going to a cafe for
coffee
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 or
tea
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.
Overall
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, the highest proportions belong to the
category
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 of going to a cafe for
coffee
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 or
tea
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 in four
cities
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. The only city is
Adelaide
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that
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which
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 has a different
category
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 for the highest proportion, which is buying
instant
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coffee
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.
Additionally
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, the percentage of people buying
instant
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coffee
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 was always higher than that of those purchasing fresh
coffee
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 in all
cities
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. In detail, Melbourne, Sydney, Hobart, and Brisbane nearly have percentages of 64%, 63%, 61%, and 56%, respectively, for the
category
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 of going to a cafe for
coffee
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 and
tea
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. For
Adelaide
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, the highest percentage is nearly 50% for the
category
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 of bought
instant
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coffee
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.
Furthermore
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, the lowest proportions for all
cities
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 belong to the
category
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 of buying fresh
coffee
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. The minimum proportion among the
cities
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 belongs to Brisbane with 33%, followed by
Adelaide
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 with 34%.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words adelaide, coffee, tea, instant, category, cities with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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