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Woman can do everything that men can and they even do it better. They also can do many thing that men cannot. But it is a fact that their work is not appropriated as much as men, although they have to sacrifice a lot to their family and career. What do you think?

#woman #men #fact #work #sacrifice #career
well , these days and with the tremendous speed of everything around us , Buying things on the internet become more common and more
customer oriented
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 compared to the past in my opinion: why
peoplepeople
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people people
 start to
bought
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buy
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 their needs from the Internet is because it is the easiest way to
order
athorways
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pathways
 people can
order
 anytime and any place just with one click you can find and receive what you ask for
however
,
this
 does not mean that baying from
Internet
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does
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does not have any risks or any problems in my view
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 all these advantages we can apsullwtly find the disadvantages
for example
the size
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 customer can not be sure about the size and most of them have
wrong
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 size
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 if they want to return the
order
 or refund their money it will take more time and
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sometimes
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 they just can not do anything with
this
order
 ,
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 with if they go emidimmediately to the store
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