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Your local bookshop has invited members of the public to recommend a guest speaker for an upcoming event that will include a series of talks from well-known people.

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Dear Bookshop I hear that our bookshop will have a very important event that concerns speaking
frome
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from
 famous speaker. As members of the local
community
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 we are invited to suggest a good speaker. On
this
 occasion, I want to advise some good speakers who can support and encourage
this
 interesting event for people. Dr. David Hall
who
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has more experience
about
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 talking to the public.
In addition
, He has written plenty of books and many
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book
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books
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 are bestsellers. I am fully confident he can make
this
 event interesting and
motivating
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 the public to
attain
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. In his major works, Dr. David focuses on mindfulness which is a trend of our society. Numerous people are curious to learn about
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 mindfulness.
For
this
 reason. If we invite him to deliver a speech at the
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event
, he can persuade a lot of people who are eager to know about mindfulness in our daily
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. yours faithfully, Victor
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structure
The structure of the letter is weak, with no clear introduction or conclusion. Ensure the letter has a greeting, an introduction paragraph, a body where you elaborate on your recommendation, and a clear conclusion.
grammatical accuracy
There are several grammatical errors and inappropriate usage of words which hinders the clarity of the message. Consider revising the language for accuracy.
organization
Use paragraphs to organize your ideas and ensure that each paragraph deals with a single theme.
development
Expand on your main points by providing more specific examples and explanations of why Dr. David Hall would be a suitable guest speaker.
task response
There should be a clear response to the task which includes fully developed points and relevant examples. The suggestion of Dr. David Hall needs to be connected to the impact he could have on the event.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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