The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
The given line graph indicates the
visition
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visit to
a Caribbean
island
in terms of the figures
of
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for
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touristh
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tourists
tourist
during the 8- year period.
Overall
, the total
vistors
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visitors
in
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to
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Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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island
increased, no matter
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whether touristed
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touristed
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tourists
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in the way of staying on
cruise
ships
or staying on
island
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the island
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, these figures of tourists all rose between 2010 and 2017.  The amounts of tourists of
total
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the total
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in
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the Carbbean
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Carbbean
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Caribbean
was
at
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apply
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3.5
millions
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million
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in the year 2017. In the same year, the
numbers
of
vistors
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visitors
of
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apply
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staying on
cruise
ships
and on
island
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the island
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were
at
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apply
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2
millions
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million
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and
at
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1.5
millions
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million
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respectively. During the 8-year period, the total
numbers
of Caribbean
island
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islands
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experienced a
dramatical
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dramatic
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growth, especially between 2016 and 2017.
However
, the
numbers
of staying on
cruise
ships
and on
island
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islands
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fluctuated in the starting years - 2010 to 2013. But some changes happened between 2015 and 2016, people switched the way of visiting.
After
this
change, the figures
of
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for
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staying on
cruise
ships
increased to 2 million in 2017.
In contrast
,
less
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fewer
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tourists stayed on
island
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the island
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, so the
numbers
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number
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of staying on
island
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the island
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declined in 2016 and
then
remained the
numbers
of visitors at 1.5
millions
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million
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in 2017.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words island, cruise, ships, millions, numbers with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • gradual increase
  • sharp decline
  • steady growth
  • plateau
  • seasonal variation
  • external influences
  • tourist influx
  • sustainable tourism
  • economic impact
  • hospitality industry
  • travel restrictions
  • visitor statistics
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