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The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart
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 the scores of three teams for four different seasons .Let us summarise the given chart below.
Points
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 taken by three
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team
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teams
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such
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 as A,
B
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 and
C
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 are shown in the chart. In
this
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the
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team
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B
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 has won all the seasons against
other
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the other
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 two
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team
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teams
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 A and
C
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. In the
year
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 2002,
the
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apply
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team
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 A has taken
less
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fewer points
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point
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among
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than
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 other teams.
Team
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B
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 has taken 82
points
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 in the same
year
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.
Team
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C
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has taken
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took
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 15
points
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 in the
year
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 2003,
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this
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 is more compared to
team
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 A.
Team
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 A and
teamC
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team
team C
teams
has
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had
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 approximately equal
points
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 in the
year
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 2003 [
11point
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11 points
 and 15
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point
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points
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].
Team
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 A has taken 35
points
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 in the
year
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 2004 and
team
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C
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 had taken 12
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point
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points
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,
this
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 was the lowest
point
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 taken by a
team
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 in the
year
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 2004. In 2005,
team
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B
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has taken
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had
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 the highest among all teams [55point] and the other two
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team
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teams
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has
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had
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 below 10
points
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 .
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words points, team, b, c, year, point with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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