The line chart shows trends in terms of employment in the USA in millions and predictions for the future

The line chart shows trends in terms of employment in the USA in millions and predictions for the future
The line graph illustrates the trends of jobs that people are working in
USA
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from 1975 to 2025.
Overall
, it is apparent that there is a significant change
for
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the
services
and the agricultural workers in the given periods.
Whereas
, manufacturing
job
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jobs
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had some fluctuation. In detail, in 1975 the manufacturing employment was nearly 10
millions
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million
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.
Then
it reached its peak in 1980
around
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40
millions
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million
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. After that it decline and in 2025, it will reach again in 10
millions
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same as when the period starts.
Similarly
,
services
was
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same
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number as manufacturing from 1975 to 1980. Later
this
trend increased
while
manufacture
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jobs declined. It is visible from the chart that
services
employment will be about 90
millions
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million
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in 2025. Compared to the
services
and the manufacture, the agriculture employment was highest in the
begging
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of the time given and had no changes until 1977.
Further
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this
trend went down gradually up to 20
millions
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in 1985.
According to
the graph, agriculture jobs will reduce again in 2025.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words services, millions with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "trends" in your introduction.
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