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your friend from another country is coming to stay with you and your family for a week, for the first time. write an email to this friend about the visit. in your email you should : explain where you would like to take your friend describe who your friend will meet say what your friend should bring your email should be 50 words at least

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Hi Reem , How are you ? I hope you are doing fine .
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 tell me what you were doing in the
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 exam you told me about. As you know my mom told me you will come to stay with us for a week, I'm excited! we have a lot of things to do ,
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, we can go to the nearby island and rent a tent to camp in.
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 , in the
last
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 week, a new cinema has been opened,
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, we can go and watch a new Indian film by Salman Khan, or we can do both. I have organised
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 meet our old friend Raja she will come from Italy
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 she will stay with her grandmother. In Malaysia the weather is rainy most time ,
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 reason, you should bring an umbrella with you. Don't be late I'm waiting for you. Your friend Oula Best wishes
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Coherence & Cohesion
You need to include a more defined introduction and closing to provide better cohesion to your email. The body of the email should logically flow from the introduction and be wrapped up effectively in the conclusion.
Task Achievement
Make sure to complete all tasks. It's important to clearly explain where you want to take your friend, describe who they will meet, and mention what they should bring. Each point should be explained in sufficient detail for full task achievement.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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