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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries
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The two tables
illustrates
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 data
sales
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 of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas within five years (1999-2004) in Switzerland,
Denmark
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,
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UK
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the UK
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, Belgium, and
Sweden
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.
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, it can be seen that
coffe
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coffee
sales
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 showed an
improved
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sales
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 from 1999 to 2004 with the highest
sales
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 was the
UK
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.
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 in bananas
sales
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, three of the countries (Switzerland,
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UK
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the UK
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, and Belgium) increased,
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Sweden
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 and
Denmark
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 showed
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a dicreased
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decrease
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 the first table, the
UK
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 has achieved the highest
sales
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 among the other countries in coffee, from 1.5
million
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euros
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 to 20
million
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euros
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 in these five years,
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Sweden
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 and
Denmark
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 had the lowest coffee
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 with only 0.2
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euros
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 from 1999 to 2004.
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 the second table, Switzerland showed an increase in banana
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 with 47
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euros
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 in 2004 from 15
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euros
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 in 1999.
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, the
UK
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 and Belgium
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 experienced growth in their
sales
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.
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,
sales
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 in
Denmark
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 and
Sweden
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 decreased by around 1
million
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euros
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 over the period, with 1,8 and 2
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euros
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, respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "similarly, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, denmark, uk, sweden, million, euros with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade sales
  • significant growth
  • trends and patterns
  • market expansion
  • sustainable consumption
  • ethical products
  • consumer awareness
  • economic impact
  • percentage increase
  • market share
  • profit margins
  • trade initiatives
  • consumer behavior
  • retail figures
  • economic indicators
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