You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The chart presents the
propotion
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proportion
of the
population
in different Asian countries, namely
Philippines
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the Philippines
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,
Malaysia
, Thailand and
Indonesia
. The figures show changes in the percentage of total people from 1970 to 2020, with
overview
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an overview
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up to 2040 year.
Overall
, the main trend for all counties remains
steadly
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steady
steadily
, the percentages of
whole
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the whole
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population
is
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are
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rising through the years. Comparing countries, there are
two
of them show
a
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apply
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sharply grow
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sharp growth
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,
otherwise
another
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other
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two
demostrate
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demonstrate
a
steadily
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steady
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change. The percentage of
total
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the total
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population
experienced
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that experienced
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growth for all countries, reached a peak in 2040 year.
Number
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The number
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of people
of
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in
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total
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the total
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population
in
Malaysia
and
Indonesia
increased dramatically from 2000 to 2040 years. The percentages
achieve
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are
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about 65 and 80 in
Indonesia
and
Malaysia
, respectively.
On the other hand
, as the growth of the
population
in Thailand and
Philippines
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the Philippines
show examples
went up, the total number of people
were
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was
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lower than in
Malaysia
and
Indonesia
. To summarise, there are
two
main trends on the graph: a consistent upward trend in
population
grow
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growth
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, and a steady growth with
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a sharply
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sharply
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sharp
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increase of another
two
of them.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, malaysia, indonesia, two with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urban population
  • Trend analysis
  • Urbanization rate
  • Economic development
  • Rural-urban migration
  • Infrastructure
  • Socio-economic events
  • Stagnation
  • Anomalies
  • Environmental concerns
  • Predictive analysis
  • Geographical aspects
  • Government policies
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