The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.
The line graph displays the data about the consumption of
fuel
and the prediction of that in the USA from 1980 to 2030. In general, petrol and oil contribute the most ratio of energy consumption and it may reach about 50 quadrillion
units
by 2030.
Similarly
, coal, which is the second
fuel
waste in energy use,
also
exhibited a steady increase since 1980 and is projected will see 30 quadrillion
units
in 2030. In comparison, consuming natural gas
units
shows a frequent fluctuation between 1980 and 2015,
whereas
it slightly decreased in 1985 and 2010 respectively. And it is predicted dramatically stable until 2030.
However
, other kinds of
fuel
such
as Nuclear, Solar
or
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Wind and Hydropower
are consumed
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have consumed
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only 5 quadrillion
units
and they may not experience a significant increase in the coming 15 years. In summary, petrol and oil, coal and natural gas will continuously be the main
fuel
in energy consumption.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fuel, units with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Energy consumption
  • Renewable resources
  • Non-renewable resources
  • Fossil fuels
  • Nuclear power
  • Hydroelectric power
  • Solar energy
  • Wind energy
  • Biomass
  • Consumption patterns
  • Technological advancements
  • Energy efficiency
  • Sustainable development
  • Carbon footprint
  • Energy policy
  • Projections
  • Decade
  • Significant shifts
  • Economic factors
  • Environmental impact
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