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the graph below shows the populations in india and china since the year of 2000and predicts populations growth untill 2050

the graph below shows the populations in india and china since the year of 2000and predicts populations growth untill 2050
#populations #india #china #year #growth #untill
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The graph provides information about the
number of
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population’s
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population
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 growth in
India
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 and
China
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 in 2000 and the projection until 2050.
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, the number of populations in
India
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was
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increased exponentially from 2000 to 2050.
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,
China
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’s population
was
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 increased moderately and is projected to decrease gradually in 2050. In more detail, the number of people in
India
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was
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 increased gradually from 1
billion
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 in 2000 to 1,35
billion
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 in 2020, and it is projected to reach 1,6
billion
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 in 2050.
India
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 will surpass
China
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 in 2040 with
total
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populations
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population
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1,5
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of 1,5
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billion
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.
India
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 is projected to reach its peak of 1,6
billion
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 in 2050. Meanwhile,
in
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 2000 to 2020,
China
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’s residents went up exponentially from 1,25
billion
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 to 1,41
billion
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 and increased slightly to 1,42
billion
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 in 2030. The growth of people in
China
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 will decrease gradually until 2050. Population growth in
China
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 is predicted
fell
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 gradually from 1,42
billion
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 in 2030 to 1,39
billion
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 in 2050.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words india, china, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 4 times.
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