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The Diagrams Below Show Changes In Felixstone In The UK Between 1967 And 2001.

The Diagrams Below Show Changes In Felixstone In The UK Between 1967 And 2001.
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The
two
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 maps depict some obvious and mild changes
comparison
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of
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Felixstone
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Felixstowe
 between 1967 and 2001. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is evident that the under-developed area was modernized with more cutting-edge facilities and customer services. In terms of radical shifts, the farmland in the
North-east
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 of the map was converted into a hotel with difficult customer services
such
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 as a swimming pool and
two
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 homogenous tennis courts. On the other side, the private beach was erected in the place where
fish
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the fish
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 market used to be,
while
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 the marina and the pier located adjacent to the sea
was
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were
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 demolished and substituted by a public beach. What is more, four wind turbines
was
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 constructed at the removal of the
dunes
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dune's
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 sand and trees. With respect to small changes, the hotel in the
center
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centre
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 of the map was renovated with
addition
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the addition
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 of car parking.
Furthermore
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, the
two
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 shops in the
two
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 wings of the high street experienced an extension and the one
in
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on
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 the east side observed a conversion into
an apartments
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apartments
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.
Finally
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, no response detected records
any
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of any
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 changes in the golf course in the North-west and the hotel in the heart of the map.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words two with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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