Buying things on the internet, such as books air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantage of shopping in this way weight the disadvantage
In
modern
era , Add an article
the modern
E- commerce
has Add a hyphen
E-commerce
been
common and Verb problem
become
every one
Replace the word
everyone
tries
Wrong verb form
trying
this
. Technology is increasing. So every people
thing easy and quick will finish them
work , nowadays online shopping is going to rending. Change the pronoun
their
This
give some advantage and some drawbacks, in my opinion, ignore the disadvantage
ways and Replace the word
disadvantageous
use
the beneficial way
On one
hand , more Correct article usage
the one
people
tries
online shopping because these have many selections and can Change the verb form
try
easy to
compare other Replace the word
easily
websites
also
easy to choose which is like , Nowadays criminals increased
. So many Wrong verb form
increase
people
think online payment good
than cash payment Correct word choice
is better
method
. In busy life , Fix the agreement mistake
methods
websites
give easy and quick search and can buy still home . This
way
people
feel online shopping is good .
On other
hand , part of Correct article usage
the other
people
think
online shopping is bad Change the verb form
thinks
,
because they feel Remove the comma
apply
websites
are not secure and our account numbers record other systems so that is
risk
. So will face Add an article
a risk
many
Correct your spelling
any
problem
in future and some Change to a plural noun
problems
people
have
not knowledge about the using Add a missing verb
do have
internet
Capitalize word
Internet
buying
and selling. They don’t Change the verb form
to buy
like
try Add the particle
like to
this
way
. For example
, nowadays many websites
are duplicated so our information have
not secure
In conclusion, in my point of view we can Verb problem
is
use
our easy way
using the internet shopping is easy and quick in the busy world , so use
without
drawbacks Correct pronoun usage
it without
way
and will use
beneficial way
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task achievement
Develop your ideas more fully with appropriate explanations and examples. For instance, when mentioning the risks of online payment, provide concrete examples or statistics to support your point.
coherence cohesion
Ensure you have a clear introduction and conclusion that outline your main points and summarize your stance, respectively. The introduction and conclusion in your essay need to be more clearly defined.
coherence cohesion
Work on the logical flow of your points. Start with a clear topic sentence for each paragraph and follow with supporting details. The ideas presented should be easier to follow and relate to each other in a logical manner.
task achievement
To better meet the task requirements, provide a balanced discussion of both advantages and disadvantages of the topic. Ensure you fully address both sides to show a well-rounded perspective.
coherence cohesion
Use a wider variety of cohesive devices and paragraphing to aid in the organization and flow of your essay. Phrases such as 'On one hand', 'On the other hand', and linking words like 'However', 'Furthermore', can help with structure.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?