In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Transportation
involves Use synonyms
in
5o many part of our lives Change preposition
apply
everyday
as not only does it helps us deliver stuff faster, but Correct your spelling
every day
also
helps us Linking Words
moving
from Change the form of the verb
move
a
place to another one Correct determiner usage
one
easier
. In some countries, it is argued Rephrase
more easily
that
whether the budget for Correct word choice
apply
transportation
should be spent on developing the ones which already exist or to allocate it to new railway lines for speedy Use synonyms
trains
. Many may say, and I agree, Use synonyms
only
when we improve what we have Correct word choice
that only
first,
can we owe Linking Words
such
an improved country.
Constructing new public Linking Words
transports
like fast Fix the agreement mistake
transport
trains
can be a huge improvement as it can reduce the time we Use synonyms
spent
on roads.
Wrong verb form
spend
Besides
, it can encourage so many tourists from countries which have no Linking Words
such
a thing to ones having it. Linking Words
For example
, Japan is one of the places that provides speedy Linking Words
trains
between cities. Use synonyms
That is
, not only does Japan extend its Linking Words
economic
, but Replace the word
economy
also
it provides Linking Words
an easier travel
for whoever Remove the article
easier travel
an easier journey
an easier trip
Use synonyms
use
Correct subject-verb agreement
uses
this
new vehicle.
Linking Words
However
, some other people assume that enlarging existing Linking Words
transportation
Use synonyms
vehicles
is more significant as they are used more by local people. Use synonyms
That is
, developing buses, Linking Words
trains
, subways and other Use synonyms
vehicles
can provide better service to workers who Use synonyms
use
these public transports every day.
Use synonyms
Moreover
, I think focusing on existing public Linking Words
vehicles
Use synonyms
prevent
the emissions of pollution as people Correct subject-verb agreement
prevents
use
their own cars less. Use synonyms
For instance
, there are some special Linking Words
vehicles
in Iran in a tourist zone called Tochal that work by electricity, so anyone can Use synonyms
use
Use synonyms
it
.
In conclusion, every country has a limited budget for improving Correct pronoun usage
them
transportation
, so they have to consider spending it Use synonyms
on
Change preposition
in
a
most Change the article
the
profit
way.Replace the word
profitable
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