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The chart show requests for information at a tourist office in the United kingdom from january to june

The chart show requests for information at a tourist office in the United kingdom from january to june
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The graph illustrates information requested at a tourist office in the United Kingdom between January and June.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
requests
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 by letter/email slightly
decrease
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decreased
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.
Meanwhile
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Meanwhile,
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 the other way increases the request.
Requests
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 in person and by phone steadily increased.
In person
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requests
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 got nearly 400 in January, lower than the two others. But the
requests
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 peaked at approximately 2000 which was the highest in June. Phone
requests
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 followed
the
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a
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 similar pattern, starting at just under 1000 unlike
in person
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in-person
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requests
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it
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which
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 fell exactly
at
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to
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 800
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then
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and then
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 rose significantly right at 1600.
However
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, the
requests
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 by letter or email experienced the opposite of them,
that
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which
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 means declined. In January the request stood at almost 800 and continuously dropped until May. It finished at slightly less than 400 in June that had remained with a month before.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words requests with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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