The chart below shows the total numbers of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories from 1995 to 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the total numbers of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories from 1995 to 2002.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph
illustrate
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who
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how
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many
mintes
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minutes
of call phone in
Uk
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the Uk
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by
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in
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three main
category
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namely,local fixed
line
, national and international- fixed
line
, and mobiles (all calls) between1995
to
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between
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2002.
Overall
, it can be seen that
local
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the local
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fixed
line
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lines
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experienced the
hieghest
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highest
mintes
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minutes
by
Uk
resedents
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residents
,
while
the number of
mintes
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minutes
of mobiles was the lowest'
although
both it and
national
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and international fixed
line
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lines
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witnessed
upward
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an upward
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trend.
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first
line
which is
local
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the local
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fixed
line
and
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has the greatest number of
mintes
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minutes
by
Uk
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UK
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residents during all timespan. It started at more than 70 million of
minutes
and continued to
increased
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from approximately 80 to 90 million of
minutes
from1996 to 1999 respectively. It
has
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then
alittle
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a little
little
dropped to less than 90 in 2000. And in 2002 it had the same amount as it began. In
term
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of
other
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the other
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two lines which had similar
trend
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. Both were
climped
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climbed
clamped
clumped
up in all time period and national and international showed more
minutes
than all calls. National and international started with less than 40
millon
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million
of
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minutes
that
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used by people
form
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from
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the Uk
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Uk
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UK
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,
while
mobile had about under 5 in 1995. Both spiked to
to
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about just over 60 million
of
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minutes
and less than 50 in the
last
year.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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