The oie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy consumption of the UK in two years

The oie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy consumption of the UK in two years
The pie charts give information on different types of energy
consumption
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the UK between 1995 and 2005.
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, the highest
consumption
percentage
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hold
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by gas in both
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years
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while
the lowest
percentages
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in both
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is
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category. Regarding the given data, in 1995, the highest energy
consumption
was gas at 29.63%. The coal production was second from the top at 29.80%,
it
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was slightly higher compared to
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by 0.63%. The usage of nuclear was low at 6.40%
while
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on
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that year was
other
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category
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with 4.90%. In
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, the amount of energy
consumption
in 2005 was
slighly
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slightly
higher than a decade before by
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% gap. The rate of
cole
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also
had an increase from 29.63% in 1995 to 30.31% in 2005.
In contrast
, the percentage of Petro had
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by roughly 10%
while
the
consumption
on
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nuclear and other
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rose, both
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around 10%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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