The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing houswork in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing houswork in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graphs
portrays
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the percentage in household of electrical
appliances ownerships
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appliance ownership
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and its relationship to household chores i.e laundry, meal preparation and cleaning from the
year
1920 to – 2019 in a specific country. Generally, the number of families acquiring electrical
appliances
increases
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over the
years
, with two products, namely the washing machine and vacuum cleaner, reaching 100% ownership in 1980 and 2000.
Although
not as fast as the others, the purchase of washing machine
also
showed a positive trend and sales rose by approximately 30% in the
99
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99-year
years
period. In contrary to the increasing popularity of electrical
appliances
, the amount of time invested for housework seemed to be decreasing.
This
meant that an inverse relationship existed between
the
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electrical device ownership and time dedicated
for
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weekly household chores. The popularity of refrigerators started at the lowest point (0%) and rose constantly, up to 2 folds
in
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every 20
years
, before plateauing in the
year
1980 and before reaching 100%
until
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the end of the period in the
year
1980. The same phenomenon could
also
be observed in the purchase of vacuum cleaners, whereby their sales increased by 20 % every 2 decades before reaching 100% in the
year
2000.
On the other hand
/
however
, the purchase of washing
machine
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machines
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,
on the other hand
, increased slowly
?
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.
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at a slower pace, and experienced a slight drop in demand in the
year
1980 before
finally
covering 70% of families in the
year
2019. As the number of purchases of electrical
appliances
increased, a fivefold decrease in the amount of time required to complete housework could be observed within the
90
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90-year
years
period.
This
observation could indicate an increased efficiency provided by electrical
appliances
in modern households.
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