Death penalty is still practiced in jurisdiction system of many countries. Some people believe that this type of punishment should be abolished. However, others are of opposite opinion. Discuss both sides of this debate and give your own opinion.

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countries
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to handle severe crimes which were
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while
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banned
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punishments. Both sides have valid reasons to prove their points,
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will be discussed in the following paragraphs
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my viewpoint. To commence with, some nations believe that
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is
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crucial
to curb many serious criminal activities. Serious killers like
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and kidnappers who killed people with cold
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should be
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dealt
with
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punishments. Apart from that, terrorists and
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are not controlled by
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prisoners
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life sentences could not improve their nature.
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, Osama Bin Laden who was the mastermind of
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9/11 attack which
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in America was
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sentenced
to
death
for killing many innocent residents of
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states.
On the contrary
, some folks believe,
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and rapists are not born with
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basic education to find a suitable job.
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, some offenders might learn some
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in the future. To encapsulate, though,
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to
death
is hard to accept,
however
, it is crucial to eradicate the crime. In my opinion,
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should only
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when
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community or earth
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danger on account of someone, if there
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some hope for improvement,
then
it should be delayed or postponed.
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task response
Your essay partially addresses the task. Improve by clearly discussing both viewpoints and providing a more nuanced explanation of your own opinion.
coherence cohesion
Use a range of cohesive devices effectively and ensure paragraphs are well-structured. Your essay exhibited a lack of clear logical progression in places.
task achievement
Discuss both views thoroughly and provide supporting examples for each point made. Your essay included examples but they should be more directly relevant and specific to the argument presented.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • capital punishment
  • jurisdiction
  • deterrent
  • morality
  • rehabilitation
  • wrongful convictions
  • innocence
  • retribution
  • ethical dilemmas
  • life sentence
  • judicial system
  • human rights
  • lethal injection
  • electric chair
  • justice
  • penal system
  • recidivism
  • appeal process
  • clemency
  • miscarriage of justice
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