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You have arranged a meeting with a business partner. Unfortunately, you have to change the arrangement. Write a letter to your business partner. In your letter, ● apologise for the changes ● explain the reason why the changes were needed ● explain the new arrangement

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to extend my sincere apologies for the unexpected changes to the arrangements for our meeting
that is
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 going to be held on 29th November. I am sincerely sorry for making changes at the
last
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 moment. I was not aware of
this
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 change unless
,
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apply
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 I got an email from the restaurant. I booked a table in Mary restaurant around 2 months ago. Yesterday, I received an email from them informing
that
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me that
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 the restaurant is going through
renovation
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a renovation
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 process
due to
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 water leakage, necessitating a change in our meeting location. I understand the inconvenience
this
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 may cause and appreciate your understanding. I tried my best to find
appropriate
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an appropriate
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 location which is convenient
to
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for
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 both of us. Luckily, I was able to find one,
that is
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 Bryne café which is located on Mapleview
drive
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Drive
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. The date and time for the meeting remain unchanged. The table number is 5 and
register
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registered
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 under my name. If you have any questions, please contact me. I am looking forward to meeting you.
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Yours
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Your
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Yours
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 faithfully, Jashan

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Coherence/Cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph contains a single, clear idea to maintain strong coherence. Refrain from introducing multiple points in one paragraph unless they are closely related and can be connected logically.
Coherence/Cohesion
Strive to establish a logical progression of information throughout the letter. While your letter had a generally clear structure, transitions between paragraphs could be smoothed out for better flow.
Task Achievement
The greeting should be personalized if the recipient's name is known. Since 'Sir or Madam' is used, it would be more appropriate if you don't know the recipient's name; otherwise, use their name. In a business context using specific names, if known, adds a personal touch and shows attention to detail.
Task Achievement
For task achievement, provide all the necessary information requested by the prompt in an organized manner. This was mostly achieved but ensure that all new arrangements are as detailed as they need to be.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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