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You have arranged a meeting with a business partner. Unfortunately, you have to change the arrangement. Write a letter to your business partner. In your letter, ● apologise for the changes ● explain the reason why the changes were needed ● explain the new arrangement

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to extend my sincere apologies for the unexpected changes to the arrangements for our meeting
that is
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 going to be held on 29th November. I am sincerely sorry for making changes at the
last
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 moment. I was not aware of
this
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 change unless
,
Remove the comma
apply

It appears that you have an unnecessary comma after the subordinating conjunction unless. Consider removing the comma.

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 I got an email from the restaurant. I booked a table in Mary restaurant around 2 months ago. Yesterday, I received an email from them informing
that
Correct pronoun usage
me that

It seems that there is a pronoun problem here.

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 the restaurant is going through
renovation
Correct article usage
a renovation

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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 process
due to
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 water leakage, necessitating a change in our meeting location. I understand the inconvenience
this
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 may cause and appreciate your understanding. I tried my best to find
appropriate
Add an article
an appropriate
the appropriate

The noun phrase appropriate location seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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 location which is convenient
to
Change preposition
for

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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 both of us. Luckily, I was able to find one,
that is
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 Bryne café which is located on Mapleview
drive
Capitalize word
Drive

The word drive should be capitalized in this context.

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. The date and time for the meeting remain unchanged. The table number is 5 and
register
Wrong verb form
registered

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb register. Consider changing it.

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 under my name. If you have any questions, please contact me. I am looking forward to meeting you.
Correct the word
Yours

It appears that the word Your is not the correct form of the possessive pronoun. Consider changing it.

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Your
Correct your spelling
Yours

The word Your doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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 faithfully, Jashan

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Coherence/Cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph contains a single, clear idea to maintain strong coherence. Refrain from introducing multiple points in one paragraph unless they are closely related and can be connected logically.
Coherence/Cohesion
Strive to establish a logical progression of information throughout the letter. While your letter had a generally clear structure, transitions between paragraphs could be smoothed out for better flow.
Task Achievement
The greeting should be personalized if the recipient's name is known. Since 'Sir or Madam' is used, it would be more appropriate if you don't know the recipient's name; otherwise, use their name. In a business context using specific names, if known, adds a personal touch and shows attention to detail.
Task Achievement
For task achievement, provide all the necessary information requested by the prompt in an organized manner. This was mostly achieved but ensure that all new arrangements are as detailed as they need to be.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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