In many parts of the world, people search for family history. Some people think that finding for the previous generations is a thing to do, but others think that it is better to be focus on present and future generations. Discuss both views and show your opinion

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it is important to know about family
history
, from there you will know the
history
about that
also
you learn more about their culture, how to communicate, how to
interacting
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and how to deal with them and know how to
be act
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in the future.
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On
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the other hand family
history
could
we
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leave as family
history
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be
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history
that
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don't
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wanna we take in the future
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