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The chart below shows the number of travellers using three major airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000.

The chart below shows the number of travellers using three major airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000.
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Depicted in the diagram
the
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 number of
travellers
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 using three main airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000.
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, in almost
full
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 period difference between
three
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the three
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 airports was not too big, but
LaGuardia
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airport
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 showed the highest result in almost every year.
LaGuardia
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 was visited by 68 million
travellers
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 in 2000 which was the highest index all over the period and more like 2 times than
index
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 in 1995
that
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 equals
to
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35
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millions
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million
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. Regarding
on
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John
F.Kennedy
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F. Kennedy
airport
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 the highest result was in 1997 which amounts to 48
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millions
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million
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 and
slightly
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 higher than
LaGuardia
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airport
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that
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which
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 has about 42
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millions
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million
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in
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this
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 year. About 42
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millions
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million
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travellers
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 visited the Newark
airport
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 in 1998 which equals to indexes in 1999 and 2000, which
more
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is more
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 than
statistics
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the statistics
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 in 1995 for about 3 times which amounts to 16
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millions
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million
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.
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, in 1996 John
F.Kennedy
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F. Kennedy
airport
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 was visited by 35
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millions
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million
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travellers
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that
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which
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 equals to lowest index of
LaGuardia
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airport
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words travellers, laguardia, airport, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • significant increase
  • highest number
  • steady increase
  • largest growth
  • dramatic
  • slowest growth
  • slight decrease
  • gradual increase
  • period
  • travelers
  • major airports
  • followed by
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