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The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the numbe of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people’s opinion on speed cameras. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below

The graphs below show the number of drivers in Britain who have been caught driving too fast by speed cameras placed on roads, and the numbe of people killed in road accidents, over an eight-year period since the introduction of speed cameras. The tables show the results of a survey on people’s opinion on speed cameras. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below
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The charts illustrate the
number
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 of riders in the United Kingdom who have been spotted exceeding the speed limit on speed
cameras
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as well as
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 the
number
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 of fatalities
due to
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road
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 accidents for an octaeteris since the installation of speed
cameras
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 on the roads.
Overall
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, even after the introduction of speed
cameras
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,
road
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accidents
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 fatalities
number
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 fluctuated in the same range over an eight-year period. Meanwhile, the
number
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 of speed limit violation fines kept on rising. The tables give information about
public’s
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the public’s
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thought
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thoughts
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 regarding
with
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apply
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speed
cameras
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. Turned out
60
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that 60
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% of the respondents believed that the
cameras
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 did not improve
road
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 safety at all
whereas
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 32% of them believed
it
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they
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 did. Regarding the purposes of
installment
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instalment
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, 26% of the participants
fell
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felt
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 that the purpose is to enhance roads safety,
while
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 71% thought that it was for materialistic purposes
,
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 since the
number
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 of accidents hasn’t decreased,
on the contrary
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 rather fluctuating between 3000 and 3400 lives lost in
road
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 fatalities annually.
On the other hand
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, the
number
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 of fined drivers kept on rising until it spiked in the
last
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 two years reaching nearly 1.6 million fines.
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, 56% of the
voter
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voters
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 think that the
number
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 of
cameras
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 is redundant.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, cameras, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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