The table below gives information about the different ways mobile phone owners use their phones in a developing country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about the different ways mobile phone owners use their phones in a developing country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table illustrates the percentages of different cell
phone
features that mobile
phone
owners use in a developing country from 2006 to 2010.
Overall
, there was around the same ratio of users using their
phones
for making calls, taking photos, and sending and receiving text messages,
while
there were dramatic increases in
phone
users playing games, searching the internet, playing music and recording videos. Throughout the time period, almost all
phone
owners made calls on their
phones
, making it the most used feature over the
years
. There were small increases in the percentage of users taking photos from around two-thirds in the beginning to 76%
at the end
. The ratio of
people
sending and receiving text messages through
phones
also
rose a little from 73% to 79% in four
years
.
On the other hand
, percentages of other features skyrocketed over the
years
. The percentage of
people
playing games on their
phone
starts from 17% and had a three-fold increase over four
years
. The ratio of
people
playing music
also
doubled from the beginning, resulting in 26%
at the end
. Only one-tenth of
people
recorded videos on their
phones
in 2008, but the numbers had nearly a four-fold increase after two
years
.
Similarly
, there are 41% of
phone
owners used their
phones
for searching the Internet in 2008, and it increased to 73%
at the end
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