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The diagram illustrates the Life Cycle process of frogs in a pond. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram illustrates the Life Cycle process of frogs in a pond. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The Life Cycle process of frogs in ponds is shown in the diagram below.
To begin
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 with, everything starts from the eggs and after some
time
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 they turn into embryos.
Then
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, the little tadpoles cling to water plants to have a safe place. With
time
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 the external gills are grown for breathing by oxygen in the water.
Next,
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the tail keeps growing and starts collecting enough nutrients for
growing
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the growth
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 of the whole body. Meanwhile, the legs are grown and
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the frog
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frog
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the frog
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 can move on the ground. First
time
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 after the legs appeared, the
frog
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 lives from food in the tale that had been collected before.
Also
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, the
frog
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's tail becomes shorter during the
time
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 the animal grows.
Finally
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, the young
frog
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 gets a full-size body
that is
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 ready for reproduction function.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, frog with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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