Currently, there is a trend toward alternative forms of medicine. However, at best these methods are ineffective, and at worst, they may be dangerous. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Use examples and explanations to support your opinion.
The use of traditional medicines has been on the increase in recent times.
However
, these forms of drugs may not work well and sometimes
harmful to our bodies. Add a missing verb
are sometimes
This
essay agrees with this
statement because not only does little or no research go into the formulation of local medicines, but also
, these preparations do not treat specific illnesses.
To begin
with, a single alternative medicine may be said to cure a wide range of diseases. This
is because these formulations are not taken through the necessary processes to extract the exact active ingredient for a specific malady. Hence
, an individual may not be cured when he takes such
medication. I once took a traditional drug when I was diagnosed with malaria. This
preparation was also
marketed as being effective against fever and headache. On completing it, the fever and headaches I experienced dissappeared
and I felt well for a Correct your spelling
disappeared
while
, but they re-surfaced after a few days. I found out I still had the parasites in my blood when I got tested a second time. Consequently
, I was not cured after swallowing the pills.
In addition
, alternate forms of medicines have not been properly researched into
; especially to determine their side Change preposition
apply
effects
and contra-indications. In certain parts of the world, herbalists for
example, wash the leaves of medicinal plants and offer them to patients to chew. These leaves have not been scientifically tested to determine their negative Add the comma(s)
, for
effects
. Subsequently
, a lot of these patients end up with dangerous outcomes. For instance
, research has concluded that the pawpaw leaf, which is popular for treating migraine in most developing countries, is the leading cause of kidney disease in sub-saharan
Africa. Change the capitalization
sub-Saharan
Thus
, the lack of research can lead to an increase in the number of people experiencing the toxic effects
of un-orthodox
drugs.
In conclusion, other forms of drugs may be less effective and harmful to our bodies despite a general increase in their use. I agree with Correct your spelling
unorthodox
this
statement because there is lack
of investigations into them. Correct article usage
a lack
Secondly
, their positive effects
are non-specific.Submitted by 1kanbliswik2 on
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