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the chart below shows the average hours worked per day by married men and women in paid employment.

the chart below shows the average hours worked per day by married men and women in paid employment.
The chart illustrates the average hours worked daily by
men
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 and
women
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 in earned from
emloyment
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employment
. In general, it is clear from the chart that, thousands paid
work
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 higher than
wives
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 paid
work
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 for all of
aged
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the aged
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.
while
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 between 24-
44
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44,
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wives
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 aged
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
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equal
work
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 at
home
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 and outside. looking at the details, with regards
husbands
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to husbands
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 aged 24-44
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work
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working
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 inside or outside, husbands 24-44
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work
Wrong verb form
working
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 outside twice as many
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work
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working
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 at
home
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as
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apply
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. After that,
wives
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 aged 24-44
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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 equal but
work
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 outside
less
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is less
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higher
Correct word choice
apply
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than unpaid
work
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 at
home
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.
However
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, between 24-44
for
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apply
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men
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 and
women
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 slightly more time
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work
Wrong verb form
working
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 outside. Focusing on
men
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 and
women
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 45-46, husbands aged 45-64
work
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 outside three times as
many
Correct quantifier usage
much
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work
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 at
home
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 as.
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on
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On
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 the other hand,
wives
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 aged 45-64 paid
work
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 marginally higher than
women
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unpaied
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unpaid
work
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 at
home
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.
Finally
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,
men
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 and
women
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 between 24-64, total they
work
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 above 10
perventage
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percentage
. sincerely

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, work, wives, home with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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