The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The
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pie chart delineates what people spent money Verb problem
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in two nations in the year 2010
In general, the expenditures for housing and food were at the top in both nations Change preposition
on
while
the opposite was true for health care. Another striking feature is that in Malaysia
, people tended to spend their money on nutrients and living accommodation was higher than that in Japan
More specifically, housing accounted for roughly one-fifth of total expenditures in Japan
at 21%, lower than 13% in Malaysia
. In addition
, the percentages of other goods and services held the top rank in both two nations at 29% and 26%, respectively. Meanwhile, the proportion of food was lower at 27% in Malaysia
, which was 3% higher than in Japan
Regarding the remaining features, the averages for transport and health care were the lowest in Malaysia
which took up 10% and 3%, respectively while
the double was true for Japan
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