The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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in two nations in the year 2010 In general, the expenditures for housing and food were at the top in both nations

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the opposite was true for health care. Another striking feature is that in

Malaysia

, people tended to spend their money on nutrients and living accommodation was higher than that in

Japan

More specifically, housing accounted for roughly one-fifth of total expenditures in

Japan

at 21%, lower than 13% in

Malaysia

In addition

, the percentages of other goods and services held the top rank in both two nations at 29% and 26%, respectively. Meanwhile, the proportion of food was lower at 27% in

Malaysia

, which was 3% higher than in

Japan

Regarding the remaining features, the averages for transport and health care were the lowest in

Malaysia

which took up 10% and 3%, respectively

while

the double was true for

Japan

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The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing.

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Many people judge success solely by money and material possessions. However, success can be achieved or measured in other ways. What are your opinions on this topic?

. You have been accepted by a university in Canada. Before moving to Canada, you want to gather some information from International Officer. Write to him about your needs. In your letter • introduce yourself • inquire about accommodation options • seek information on Student Discount Card

Traditions are about the past and innovation is about the future, and it has been argued that we need to let go of traditions for the sake of progress. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this? What role should traditions have in our lives?