Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do vou agree or disagree?
Helping other
countries
can help the whole world if we know how to help them. Many may say, and I do not agree, that the only thing that can help other Use synonyms
countries
get out of their own misery is Use synonyms
money
. Some others believe it is not enough, and poor Use synonyms
countries
must get other types of help.
It is argued by some people that helping weak Use synonyms
countries
by giving them Use synonyms
money
can help them in many ways. Use synonyms
That is
, they can allocate the given budget to fix their weaknesses in financial, tourism Linking Words
accomadation
and so much more. Correct your spelling
accommodation
For example
, by improving the historical buildings and fixing old churches, not only will a huge number of tourists attract to Linking Words
such
a Linking Words
country
, but Use synonyms
also
Linking Words
this
can help the Linking Words
financial
of that Replace the word
finances
country
Use synonyms
develope
as all tourists have to pay where ever they desire to Correct your spelling
develop
developed
VIsIt
.
Correct your spelling
visit
However
, spending Linking Words
money
needs plans and Use synonyms
speacial
structures which many Correct your spelling
special
of
poor Change preposition
apply
countries
do not pay attention to. only when a poor Use synonyms
country
Use synonyms
change
their strategy in spending Change the verb form
changes
money
, will Use synonyms
they
become a developed oneCorrect pronoun usage
it
.
Change the punctuation
?
For example
, should you give one thousand Linking Words
dollar
to your child, and tell him to spend it in a way Change to a plural noun
dollars
it
Correct pronoun usage
that
Linking Words
last
till the end of the month, he can not afford that as he does not have the skill and knowledge to do Replace the word
lasts
such
a thing. Linking Words
Therefore
, weak Linking Words
countries
need Use synonyms
export
people and Fix the infinitive
to export
also
the culture of using the Linking Words
money
in Use synonyms
a
most profitable way.
In conclusion, not only do they need financial aid, but Correct article usage
the
also
the knowledge of spending it. Linking Words
That is
how they can improve and have a developed Linking Words
country
where their young forces can become an export themselves.Use synonyms
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