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Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do vou agree or disagree?

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Helping other
countries
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 can help the whole world if we know how to help them. Many may say, and I do not agree, that the only thing that can help other
countries
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 get out of their own misery is
money
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. Some others believe it is not enough, and poor
countries
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 must get other types of help. It is argued by some people that helping weak
countries
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 by giving them
money
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 can help them in many ways.
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, they can allocate the given budget to fix their weaknesses in financial, tourism
accomadation
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accommodation
 and so much more.
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, by improving the historical buildings and fixing old churches, not only will a huge number of tourists attract to
such
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 a
country
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, but
also
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this
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 can help the
financial
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finances
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 of that
country
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develope
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develop
developed
 as all tourists have to pay where ever they desire to
VIsIt
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visit
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.
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, spending
money
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 needs plans and
speacial
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special
 structures which many
of
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apply
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poor
countries
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 do not pay attention to. only when a poor
country
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change
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changes
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 their strategy in spending
money
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, will
they
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it
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 become a developed one
.
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?
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, should you give one thousand
dollar
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dollars
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 to your child, and tell him to spend it in a way
it
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that
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last
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lasts
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 till the end of the month, he can not afford that as he does not have the skill and knowledge to do
such
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 a thing.
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, weak
countries
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 need
export
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to export
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 people and
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 the culture of using the
money
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 in
a
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the
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 most profitable way. In conclusion, not only do they need financial aid, but
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 the knowledge of spending it.
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 how they can improve and have a developed
country
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 where their young forces can become an export themselves.

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Your opinion

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