The chart below show the percentage of the day working adults spent doing different activities in a particular country in 1958 and in 2008.

The chart below show the percentage of the day working adults spent doing different activities in a particular country in 1958 and in 2008.
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The chart illustrates the proportion of
day
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grown-ups in a certain nation engaged in different activities in the years 1958 and 2008.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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adults spend the majority of their time working.
This
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was followed by the time spent sleeping.
To begin
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with, the percentage of the
day
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people spent at work was the highest in 1958. It
however
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increased from a third to a little over two-fifths in 2008. Over the same period, the portion of the
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the working class allocated to travelling to work and relaxing at home
also
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increased.
While
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they spent 8 per cent of the
day
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moving from home to work in 2008,
this
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figure stood at 2 per cent in 1958.
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, slightly less than a tenth of the
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was used for relaxing in 1958, increasing to 13 per cent in the year 2008.
On the other hand
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, the percentage of the
day
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used in sleeping and hanging out with friends reduced over the fifty-year period. Adults utilized just below a third of the
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to sleep in 1958.
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fraction was reduced to a quarter in 2008. A similar trend could be seen in the fraction of the
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working individuals hang out with family and friends. It reduced from just below a fifth to 6% in 2008. Interest in hobbies and playing sports did not change over the five decades, remaining at 6%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words day with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • technological advancements
  • leisure activities
  • household chores
  • gender roles
  • modern lifestyle
  • fast food trends
  • sleep patterns
  • health and well-being
  • societal impact
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