The chart below show the percentage of the day working adults spent doing different activities in a particular country in 1958 and in 2008.

The chart below show the percentage of the day working adults spent doing different activities in a particular country in 1958 and in 2008.
The chart illustrates the proportion of
day
grown-ups in a certain nation engaged in different activities in the years 1958 and 2008.
Overall
,
it is clear that
adults spend the majority of their time working.
This
was followed by the time spent sleeping.
To begin
with, the percentage of the
day
people spent at work was the highest in 1958. It
however
increased from a third to a little over two-fifths in 2008. Over the same period, the portion of the
day
the working class allocated to travelling to work and relaxing at home
also
increased.
While
they spent 8 per cent of the
day
moving from home to work in 2008,
this
figure stood at 2 per cent in 1958.
Also
, slightly less than a tenth of the
day
was used for relaxing in 1958, increasing to 13 per cent in the year 2008.
On the other hand
, the percentage of the
day
used in sleeping and hanging out with friends reduced over the fifty-year period. Adults utilized just below a third of the
day
to sleep in 1958.
This
fraction was reduced to a quarter in 2008. A similar trend could be seen in the fraction of the
day
working individuals hang out with family and friends. It reduced from just below a fifth to 6% in 2008. Interest in hobbies and playing sports did not change over the five decades, remaining at 6%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words day with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • technological advancements
  • leisure activities
  • household chores
  • gender roles
  • modern lifestyle
  • fast food trends
  • sleep patterns
  • health and well-being
  • societal impact
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