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The diagrams below show a structure that is used to generate electricity from wave power.

The diagrams below show a structure that is used to generate electricity from wave power.
The diagrams show a structure that
used
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is used
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 to generate
electrucuty
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electricity
 from
wave
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 power. There are shown two ways of generating electricity in
diagram
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diagrams
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 A and B. Diagram A
show
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shows
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 that
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wave
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a wave
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 is going
inder
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in
 the chamber so air is going to
column
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the column
a column
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, and helps
turbine
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the turbine
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 to spin. And it is the reason
of
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for
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 generating electricity. As we can see in B diagram the structure is opposite of A.
Wave
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 is going back so
wave
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 takes air by vacuum, so
turbine
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the turbine
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 is spinning
with
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in
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 the same direction. Air is going down from
column
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the column
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 because
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wave
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the wave
a wave
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 is
went
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going
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 off. In
conclusion
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conclusion,
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 we can see that generating in both phases is very useful.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words wave with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagrams" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "wave" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Wave power
  • Offshore
  • Kinetic energy
  • Renewable energy
  • Buoy
  • Turbine
  • Generator
  • Carbon footprint
  • Ecosystems
  • Sustainability
  • Energy portfolio
  • Scalability
  • Power grid
  • Marine environment
  • Economic viability
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