the charts below give information on the ages of the populations of yemen and italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. summarize the information and make comparison. wrtie at least 150 words.

the charts below give information on the ages of  the populations of yemen and italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. summarize the information and make comparison. wrtie at least 150 words.
The pie charts
displays
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the
comparision
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comparison
of various
age
groups in the
years
2000 and 2050 of two different countries Yemen and Italy. The
overall
data shows that the young generation is
being decreased
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and there is a rise in the
age
of
middle
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group
.
Firstly
in Yemen, half of the
population
was covered by 0-14
years
in 2000, over the
years
being increased the young
age
group
has decreased to 37%
in
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the year 2050. Ages 15-59 lies between 46
percent
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in 2000 and there is less amount of
people
who are above 60
years
while
compared to the future there is a slight increase in
age
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group
of 15-59 with a
percent
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of 57.3 and above 60
age
group
has a small increase in the
population
. In Italy, the
age
group
of youth and adults has more than half of the
population
, 24
percent
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of old
people
and less than
one fourth
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of
people
in 2000,
while
comparing
this
to 2050 the
older
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age
people
has
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the
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increased to 42% and the adults and youth
age
group
is being decreased to 46
percent
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per cent
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. Comparing the two countries the 15 to 59
age
group
has
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had
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more
population
than any other
age
groups
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group
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in 2000 and it is being increased to more in 2050.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, years, group, population, percent, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.

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