The graph shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

The graph shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
The line graph provides information about the average inflation and
diflation
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deflation
inflation
per
months
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month
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of three different metals namely, Copel,
Nickel
and
Zink
in 2014.
Overall
, it is evident that
Nickel
prices experienced the biggest rapid changes,
while
Coper
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Copper
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and
Zink
were fluctuating
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fluctuated
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gradually.
Also
, all given metals showed significant changes each
mounth
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month
. In January,
Nickel
had by far the
most high
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highest
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percentage price
in
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at
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6%,
while
Zink
metal was predicted to have only
1
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a 1
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% change, which was the lowest correction.
By contrast
, in Kune,
Nickel
percentage of price change dramatically dropped
in
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by
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9%,
while
Copper and
Zink
decreased to approximately -0.5 and -1
percent
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per cent
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respectfully
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respectively
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. In July, it is clearly seen that all given metals cost suddenly leveled off and it occurred for the next 3
monthes
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months
. In December, the
mountly
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monthly
change in prices ended with
Zink
that
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which
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had exactly
2
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a 2
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% of
rise
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the rise
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and
Nickel
by
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apply
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reaching 1%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words nickel, zink with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly change
  • prices of metals
  • trend
  • spike
  • fluctuation
  • increase
  • decrease
  • sharp rise
  • sharp fall
  • stability
  • volatility
  • data points
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • external factors
  • influences
  • market dynamics
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