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The two charts below outline the statistically most desirable countries in terms of quality of life and reasons for migration.

The two charts below outline the statistically most desirable countries in terms of quality of life and reasons for migration.
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The
pie
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chart
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 illustrated the proportion of surveys carried out on causes of migration, and the bar
chart
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 shows rankings of different
countries
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 based on life quality in 2014. In the
pie
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chart
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, there were given categories
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 as: better lifestyle, work opportunities, study, job offer, adventure, and family. And in the bar
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, there are 10
countries
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: the UK, Iceland, the Netherlands, Denmark, Switzerland, the USA, Norway, Canada, Sweden, and Australia. It's obvious from the
pie
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chart
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 that work opportunities took place just below the third part of the graph. Just below a quarter was taken for the job offer and family. Moving to other
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 to study takes 15% of the
pie
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chart
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. And the percentage of people who were searching for a better life and moved to other
countries
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 is 9%. The smallest part of the
chart
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 goes to people who were on an adventure with 3%. In the second
chart
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, it's clearly seen that the UK and Iceland, with 7.55, remain in the same ranking. In the Netherlands, the quality of life was almost 7.6; in
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 country, it's rising to 7.65 in Denmark and Switzerland. It's slightly increasing from the USA with 7.85 to Sweden and Australia with almost 8.
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, job-related factors were the most important reason for the relocation of people to other
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.
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, Sweden and Australia were ranked as more desirable locations than other
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pie, chart, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
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