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Number of tourists visiting caribbean island from 2010-2017

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Introduction The line graph presents the
number
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 of visitors to a specific Caribbean destination from 2010 to 2017. Overview
Overall
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, the total
number
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 of visitors increased throughout the given period. Despite the majority staying on land
initially
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,
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 was surpassed by those arriving on cruise liners in the final two years. Detail 1 The total
number
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 visiting the island in 2010 was 1
million
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.
This
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 figure witnessed a steady annual rise to reach approximately 2.75
million
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 in 2015. It plateaued at
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 level in 2016 before experiencing its largest increase between 2016 and 2017, soaring dramatically to its peak at 3.5
million
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. Detail 2 In 2010, most resided on the island, with around
three quarters
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 of
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million
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 remaining on land.
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 peaked in 2013 at 1.5
million
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 and hovered around that level for the remainder of the period. The
number
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 opting to visit on cruise fluctuated between a quarter and half of a
million
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 between 2010 and 2013. In 2014, there was a sharp escalation in cruise visitors, reaching 1.2
million
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 in 2016, and culminating at 2
million
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 in 2017, the highest of any category in any year.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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