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The map below shows the changes that have taken palce at the waterfront area of a town calles Darwin between 2009 and 2014.

The map below shows the changes that have taken palce at the waterfront area of a town calles Darwin between 2009 and 2014.
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The maps provided above, illustrate the comparisons that have occurred at the waterfront district of a
town
 named Darwin over the period of 2009 to 2014.
Overall
, from the information that the maps have given to us, we can find that there
were
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 some development in
this
town
 with
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construct
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some
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 new buildings
such
 as a harbour in the east and a university in the west.
Firstly
, a part of
industrial
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the industrial
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 area in the centre of
this
town
 turned into
swimming
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the swimming
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 pool and the southern part
covered
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 with trees, so the figure of swimming pools increased to 3.
Moreover
, the number of inhabitable buildings, which were in the centre, doubled to 6.
In addition
, a harbour
constructed
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in
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the
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southeast over the sea with a footpath along the
town
 which
had
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matched
east
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the east
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 and west of the city.
Subsequently
, the footpath which curcled around the lake and industrial region, contained.
Furthermore
,
school
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, convention centre, lake and fishing area
had
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remained without any changes.
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