Your next door neighbor likes to listen music late at night because of the loud music you often loose you sleep. Write a letter to the building manager.

Dear Sir or Madam, I'
m
writing
this
letter to inform you
with
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a very serious situation. My neighbor who lives in the B block 209 starts to
listen
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music
at 12:00 p.
m
. at the same time I go to sleep.
Moreover
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the
is
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music
is so loud that it disturbs my sleep cycle.
Additionally
. I'
m
preparing for
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exam. I'
m
a night owl so most of my preparation is at midnight.
This
loud
music
isn't allowing me to focus
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my studies at all.
Furthermore
, my mom is sick and she has been advised to sleep early yet the situation is disturbing her sleep cycle too. As a manager of
this
society
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I would like to request you to deal with
this
problem.
Furthermore
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I think you have to keep a real that no resident can turn
loud
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music
after 11:00 p.
m
and if it will taken seriously. By residents I think peace in society would be ensured. I hope you don't ignore my request and take up
this
issue seriously. Yours sincerely John Adams
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that the information is logically organized with clear paragraphs separating different ideas or points. Avoid merging multiple issues into a single paragraph. Maintain a logical flow throughout the letter.
task achievement
While you have used an appropriate greeting and closing, make sure to check for typos or errors such as 'real' instead of 'rule'. A more formal tone could also be employed to address the building manager effectively.
task achievement
Your letter addresses the issue and requests action, which is good for task achievement. However, be careful with spelling ('loose' instead of 'lose'), grammar, and punctuation. Enhance the formal tone by avoiding contractions such as 'I'm' and use 'I am' instead.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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