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The tables below provide information about the consumption and production of potatoes in five parts of the world in 2006.

The tables below provide information about the consumption and production of potatoes in five parts of the world in 2006.
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The tables compare five countries, in terms of
amount
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 of both consumption and production of potatoes in the year 2009. In general, it is obvious that even though Asia manufactured the highest
number
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 of potatoes, it almost consumed the least
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 of them,
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 Europe had substantial numbers
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 both of them.
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, it
ia
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 worth mentioning that Africa produced and consumed the least ratio of
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 sort of vegetable. Turning to details of the
potato
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 output, it is apparent that Asia generated the highest
tonns
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tonnes
 of
potato
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, accounting for 131,2. Europe secured the second highest amount in the table as well, standing at 126,3. There are
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 marked disparities between these two countries' numbers in
potato
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 manufacturing. These figures,
on the other hand
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, outweighed all other trends, forming less than 30
tonns
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tonnes
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. Switching to
potato
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 input,
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 Europe claimed the second highest rank in the previous table, it confirmed the utmost amount in
potato
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 utilization, amounting to 96,1 kg per person.
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 drift was 39,2
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 greater as opposed to North America.
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, other sectors, including Asia, South and Central America showed less considerable numbers in comparison with the top two figures, constituting 25,8 and 23,6
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for
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a
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person, respectively.
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, Africa represented the most modest
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, leading to
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 identical
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number
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potato
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 output, making up 14,1.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, potato with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Agricultural capacity
  • Dietary preferences
  • Cultural significance
  • Economic affordability
  • Trade policies
  • Food security
  • Production levels
  • Consumption patterns
  • Imbalance
  • Global agricultural trends
  • Technological advancements
  • Supply chain enhancements
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