Due to poorer countries experiencing a brain drain they are seeing many professionals, such as doctors and teachers, leaving to work in more develped countries. what problems does this cause what solutions can be suggested to deal with this situation?

Some professionals in developing countries decide to work in higher-income countries and settle there permanently.
This
phenomenon occurs
due to
the rapid
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growth in these developing nations, resulting in
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of higher job opportunities, and
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low better
living standards. In developing nations, job opportunities are limited as they often
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to meet demand between growth in population and workforce
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expansion
expanding
.
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imbalance between job availability and the number of individuals seeking employment
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causes
challenges to the economic sector and some people decide to work overseas to get a better opportunity. In
Indonesia
, there are several famous
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for working, like Australia and Japan. The Brain drain phenomenon can cause the
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of
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skilled and educated individuals, and it can impact the quality of that country in the long term.
Due to
the brain drain phenomenon, in
Indonesia
, government provide a scholarship for
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a student
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to study overseas but they
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should
back to
Indonesia
.
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to reduce
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the number of
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who did not return to
Indonesia
.
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, some
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still did not back to
Indonesia
and
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of their decision.
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