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You have a problem with a neighbour. Write a letter to your neighbour. In your letter -describe the problem -say how long it has been a problem -explain what action you want the neighbour to take

#neighbour #-describe #-say #-explain #action
Dear Rohit, I hope
this
 letter will
finds
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 you in radiant health and best of
the
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spirits. I am writing
this
 letter to complain
you
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to you
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 regarding
inconvenience
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the inconvenience
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 that my all family
is
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has been
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 facing
from
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since
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last
 week.
Firstly
, you know my little baby is just 3 months old and he always awoke
midnight
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 after having milk.
Then
, he could not sleep properly
due to
 loud music from your side.
Doctor
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 says
,
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this
 problem may
effect
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on
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mental and physical in future.
Secondly
, my sister came
in
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to
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 our city for
MBBS
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 exam. His final tests are next week, she could not understand and concentrate on books because of
inappropriate
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 environment.
This
 may cause
of
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failure and she is very serious about
study
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. You can understand my problem because you are already parents of two children.
It
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 will be
gratefully
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 if you take my
take my
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complain
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 positively and make some changes. Hoping for
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a favorable
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favorable
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favourable
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 response from your side regarding
this
 matter. Yours lovingly,
Sharn
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph presents a clear main idea and that the ideas within them are clearly differentiated and developed.
coherence cohesion
Use a more appropriate greeting and sign-off in your formal letter, such as 'Dear Mr. Sharma' and 'Yours sincerely'.
task achievement
Avoid using overly casual language and maintain a consistently formal or semi-formal tone throughout.
task achievement
Make sure that the problem, the duration of the issue, and the requested action from the neighbour are clearly stated and elaborated upon to fully satisfy the task requirements.
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