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pastic bottles recycling writing task 1 january 29th 2021

#pastic #bottles #january
The process chart
demonstartes
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demonstrates
 the information about the manufacturing cycle of reused
bottles
.
Overall
, there are three stages involved in
this
processing
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, it starts with collecting
bottles
 from consumers and it ends with
produce
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producing
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 new
bottles
 as well. Looking at the
digram
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diagram
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 in detail, the process
start
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starts
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 with collecting waste
bottles
 from the end users.
Then
 it is transported to
collection
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the collection
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 point by lorry.
Moreover
, the next stage is the bottle is moved to
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the cleaningpoint
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cleaningpoint
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cleaning point
 and it is cleaned by
high pressure
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high-pressure
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 water. After cleaning,
bottles
 are
classfied
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classified
 on the basis of various
clour
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colour
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such
 as green,brown and clear
glass
.
Furthermore
,
seperated
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separated
bottles
moved
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were moved
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 to the
glass
 factory.
Then
bottles
crushed
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are crushed
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 into pieces.
This
 product
passed
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passes
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 through the high
tempature
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temperature
,
furnce
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furnace
 is formed in
this
 stage. The liquid form of
glass
put
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is put
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 into the
glass
 mould.
After
this
 process,new
glass
bottles
 are used to
filling
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fill
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 the substances and moved to supermarkets.
Coustmers
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Customers
 again brought
this
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these
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bottles
.
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task achievement
Ensure that the introduction accurately paraphrases the prompt and includes all essential details.
task achievement
Provide a clear overview of the main stages of the process to better address the task.
coherence cohesion
Use a variety of linking words and phrases to improve the flow of information.
coherence cohesion
Check the structure of the essay for a clear and logical progression of ideas.
coherence cohesion
Avoid spelling and grammar mistakes to maintain academic writing standards.
coherence cohesion
Develop and support main points with detailed explanations and examples where applicable.

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