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You have a problem with a neighbour. Write a letter to your neighbour. In your letter -describe the problem -say how long it has been a problem -explain what action you want the neighbour to take

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Dear Alice, I am writing a grievance about
noise
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 from your side. Since I shifted to the Liaqat Bagh area I presumed that it was a quiet place. Unfortunately, I was wrong and I moved here
due to
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 the quiet spot.
However
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, I
do
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work from morning to evening after I come back home I hear a lot of
noise
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 of loud
music
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.
Although
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,
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 I want a complaint to you first I want to inform you. The
noise
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 was being disturbed when I moved here. It gives me a headache when you play a piece of loud
music
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especially
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 during my sleeping time. My family
also
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 suffers from
this
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noise
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 and my children cannot sleep well. My old parents
also
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 distanced too much from your
music
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. I want to suggest you please don't play
music
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 at night or at low volume to your
music
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. If you can't stop your
music
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 I will surely complain to the housing authority he will definitely solve
this
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 problem. I am looking forward to hearing from you
back
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as soon as possible. Yours Sincerely,
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph introduces a clear main idea and develops it accordingly. Avoid mixing different points in a single paragraph.
coherence cohesion
Use a logical structure by starting with your introduction followed by a paragraph for each point, and closing with a polite request or conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Improve greetings and closings to be more aligned with the level of formality expected in letter writing.
task achievement
Fully address all parts of the prompt. Describing the problem, stating the duration, and suggesting a resolution is demanded.
task achievement
Use an appropriate tone suitable for writing to a neighbor which is polite but also conveys the seriousness of your complaint.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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