The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts show the percentage of the population based on computer
ownership
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from 2002 to 2010, and the
ownership
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by education level in 2022 and 2010.
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, the number of people shown owning a computer experienced an upward trend,
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the
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measured by level of education did the same. To commence with, in the inception period, people who owned a computer stood at approximately 59%. The number
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increased slightly to about 60%. Having the same trend, the percentage saw a gradual rise to roughly 62%, 66%, and 70% in 2006, 2008, and 2010, respectively. As regards the computer-measured
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by the level of education, those with no high school diploma stood at about 15% in 2002 and increased dramatically to just over 40%. Compared to high school graduates, it started at about 37% and increased to almost 70%. Meanwhile, the number of people with incomplete college degrees was about 50% and rose to roughly 80%.
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, bachelor's degree holders and postgraduate qualifications began at 70% and 75% in 2002, and 90% and 95% in 2010.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words ownership with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consistent increase
  • growing reliance on technology
  • clear correlation
  • digital divide
  • notable growth
  • most pronounced disparity
  • gap reduced considerably
  • percentage growth
  • higher educational levels
  • educational groups
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