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The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004.

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004.
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The graph demonstrates the
expenditures
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 on three categories, namely
food
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 and
drink
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, restaurants and hotels, and entertainment, by various
age
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 groups of UK residents in 2004.
Overall
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, the data indicates that
food
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 and
drink
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expenditures
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 increase with
age
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.
Also
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,
food
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 and
drink
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 expenses were the highest for the majority of
age
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 groups, followed by restaurant and hotel expenses and entertainment. Regarding the specific category of
food
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 and
drink
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, those aged 76 and older incurred the highest
expenditures
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, approximately 23% of the total amount. The
age
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 group under 30 had the lowest
expenditures
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, accounting for only 6% of total
expenditures
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.
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, the
age
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 group under 30 had the highest restaurant and hotel
expenditures
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, at 14% of the total,
while
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 the
age
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 group 61-75 had the lowest, at 2% of the total.
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, the percentage of total spending allocated to entertainment was highest for those aged 61 to 75 and lowest for those aged under 30, at 23% and 7% respectively.
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