Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment?

It is believed by some that living in an
apartment
is more advantageous than living in a
house
. Despite the fact that
people
can enjoy more scenic views by living in an
apartment
, I believe that living in a
house
has more advantages because it is less noisy than
apartments
. Enjoying
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outside's
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view
of
sky
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, land and nature through
window
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or balcony is one of the major benefits of living in an
apartment
. Usually,
apartments
are built on
high rise
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buildings, where
people
can easily enjoy scenic views of sunrise or sunset by sitting
in
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the balcony or watching
outside
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world through windows.
This
helps them to relax their mind. In India,
for example
, individuals living in Bombay, which is one of the biggest cities in India, prefer to buy
apartments
with scenic
view
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to find some peace.
However
,
this
is a short-sighted
view
, as only nature's
view
does not solve the problems that
people
face by living in
an
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an apartment
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apartments
such
as lack of privacy. One major advantage of living in a
house
is that
people
get
less
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distractions from their
neighborhood
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. They do not have to hear noises from elevator rides or next door
apartment
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all the time.
This
peaceful environment helps them to concentrate on their work properly.
For instance
, when
people
do
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parties on weekends or if they have to be awake till late
night
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for work reasons, it will not affect their surroundings much, because in houses
people
do not have to share walls, which reduces the intensity of noise.
For
this
reason, I believe that houses are more private than
apartments
, and bring more peace in life. In conclusion, I believe that living in a
house
has more advantages because it offers
less
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disruptive environment,
while
apartment
life only offers
the
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much access to nature's
view
.
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Task Response
Task Response: Ensure you address the advantages and disadvantages of both housing options explicitly as per the essay question. Expand on the points and provide clear comparisons to fully satisfy the task.
Coherence and Cohesion
Coherence and Cohesion: Present your ideas in a more cohesive manner with better connectivity between them. Use a variety of linking words effectively to ensure smooth flow throughout the essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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