The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present.

The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present.
The pictures illustrate how a
village
in Ryemouth changed from 1995 to
present
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the present
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time. Generally, it is clear from the pictures that the
village
experienced a significant modernization. Most noticeably, the disappearance of forest
park
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parks
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,
shop
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shops
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, fish
market
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markets
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, fishing
port
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and farmland and the appearance of playgrounds
such
as golf, tennis,
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restaurant
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restaurants
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, apartments and car
park
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parks
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. In detail, the farmland and forest land in the right corner of the
village
were destroyed to build up the place which serves the demand for playing golf and tennis. Opposing
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this
huge area, people constructed more houses and the road was expanded. To meet the requirements of customers, the car park was opened next to the only hotel in the area. It is
also
worth mentioning that people in the
village
replaced shops by many restaurants and the fish market was cleared away to make room for apartments. One more thing
which was
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distracted by the villagers
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the fishing port, the corner for dwellers and visitors
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spend their time and catch fish
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words village with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urban development
  • Infrastructure
  • Residential area
  • Commercial district
  • Public amenities
  • Greenery
  • Renovation
  • Expansion
  • Demolition
  • Construction
  • Accessibility
  • Public transport
  • Urbanization
  • Evolution
  • Gentrification
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