In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries, some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. discuss both these views and give your own opinion
So important is the issue small amount of the population gains more earnings, and there were two perspectives coming from 2 sides
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one agreed and another disagreed need the parliament to acquiesce in each rank. Despite some possible disadvantages, several advantages that I will outline in my summary. Perhaps one major drawback of the issue public Correct your spelling
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, they admitted when a person got a high profit it possibly gained a rate of per capita and value in the country
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people who disagreed with people getting more salaries would be the community who are concerned with low pay. It is believed that their revenue probably with the same effort did not get the same as with high fee. Moving the fact we known in inverted pyramid there were 3 parts of substance boss, manager, and common employer. Each Add a comma
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has different responsibilities in the first case people were not in denial of people’s high payroll they knew if every population had a high cash that would increase per capita and effect to boost the economy of their rustic. And the more you get a salary the more you need to pay the tax to distribute the country
. the nation denies high wage
and reports to the government to avow their pay, back to responsibility if you got a high title you needed to hold the project that might be high risk and lot of circumstances. In summary, before we judge society with high cash we need to take a look credentials in each part, we did know the responsibility of the high fee needed to solve their problem and our civil judge already has a rule about it.Fix the agreement mistake
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