Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such place?

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The popularity of exploring rural
areas
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is growing nowadays, which prompt both positive and negative effect
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local
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area.
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the incremental tourists could boost local
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, the pollution caused by
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should not be overlooked since it could damage the environment of those
areas
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,
along with
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it, the risk that
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by
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. On the bright side,
travelors
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could stimulate local business, creating more job opportunities for residents,
moreover
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, stimulate the
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constraction
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, including
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and transportation in order to attract more
visitors
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, which could enhance the life quality of
residetns
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residents

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in the
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as
such
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.
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,
a
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village of
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in
rural
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mountain area is well known for
their
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traditional
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technic
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having the oldest
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artist, who is already 100 years old, attracting people around the world travelling
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distance
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to have their
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in
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the
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village and sleeping in the middle of
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, it
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the major income of that village which help residents improve their life quality.
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, there are various
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provoked by the number of
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growing in size in those
areas
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. First of all, the waste caused by tourists could
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to various
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to
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water resources
,
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and damage the
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ecosystem. Take Jade
mountain
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as an example, more and more
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tend to
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higest
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mountain in Taiwan, to protect
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environment from
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, the government restrict the number of
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in that area. On top of that,
travellors
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sometime put their safety
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risk by visiting places with difficult
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conditions
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extreme weather.
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patholing
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is
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favoured by many
advantors
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activities contain great
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despite with well
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. One of the most
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lady cave explorers, who conquered countless tricky caves in various
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mission
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an accident
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many experts in present but
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to save her life. To summarise, there are advantages and disadvantages regarding the trend of people visiting rural
areas
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. The former could benefit local residents with more income sources, and stimulate its development, the latter cause damage to
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environment
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putting
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individuals in dangerous
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