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The graph below shows unemployment levels in Ireland and the number of people leaving the country between 1988 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows unemployment levels in Ireland and the number of people leaving the country between 1988 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The graph below provides information concerning unemployment levels in Ireland and the
number
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 of people leaving the country between 1988 and 2008. The data can be divided into two parts, namely the
number
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 that experienced
the an
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an
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 upward trend and a downward trend. Figures are given in percentage and
number
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 of people leaving the country.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that the
number
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 of people leaving
there
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their
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 nation in 1998 was the lowest
number
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whereas
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 the highest was in 1999. In 1988, the unemployment rate reached the highest in 1988 and the lowest in 2000. Starting with the amount of citizen departing from their state was 40,000 in 1988 before slightly grew and hit
the
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a
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 peak at about 75,000 in 1999. After
that
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that,
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 the graph
remain
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remains
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 between 30,000 and 45,000
from
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apply
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over the given period. Moving on to the jobless level started at 17 in 1988 before a
significantly
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significant
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 drop to the lowest point at 5 in 2000. The graph stayed at the same rate until 2007, there was a
dramatically
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dramatic
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 increase to 11 in 2008.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 91%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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