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The chart show the percentage of male and female teachers in different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010

The chart show the percentage of male and female teachers in different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010
#show #percentage #teachers #uk
The chart gives information about various types of educational
setting
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settings
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 of male and female teachers in
the
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England in 2010.
Overall
, it is seen that
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the women
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women
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women's
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 teaching
percentage
 is
more
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below college level and
men
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men's
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percentage
high
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is high
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 after
college level
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college-level
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 education. In detail,
Female
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the Female
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 employees
percentage
 is the highest in
pre-
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preschool
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school
 at 98% followed by
primary
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the primary
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school
 at 91% in
UK
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the UK
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 in 2010.The secondary
school
percentage
 is 50%.
While in
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In
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 private training
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institutes
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institute
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institute,
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women
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women's
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percentage
 is 43% and in
university
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universities
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 ratio
is
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was
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 lowest at 24% in
the
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Britain in 2010.
On the other hand
,
male
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males
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has
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had
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 the
most
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highest
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 employment ratio in
degree level
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degree-level
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 institutes at 70% in
the
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England in 2010.After universities private institutes stood
at
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in
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 second place with
higher
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a higher
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percentage
 of
men
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male
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 employees at 50% followed by secondary
school
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schools
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 at 43%.The
least
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lowest
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 ratio of male employment in Primary
school
 and nursery
school
 at 6% and 4% respectively.
However
,
college
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colleges
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has
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had
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equal
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an equal
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 number of workers of both
gender
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genders
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 at 50% in
UK
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the UK
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 in 2010.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, school with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
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